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4 Easy Tips for Writing a Strong Fundraising Letter

By Clay Boggess on Jun 28, 2017
4 Easy Tips for Writing a Strong Fundraising Letter

Make more money with compelling, donor-centric fundraising letters

Fundraising programs are known by many for the hallmark “direct mail” letter or solicitation phone call. While much of school fundraising product sales occurs within a student’s own circle, a personal written letter can still be an impactful way to make an ask or thank a donor for their participation. Consider also that sending out an email or letter before you start going door-to-door can “warm-up” your donors so that your product sales do not become a series of cold calls.

Still, despite communicating through the written word more than most recent generations as a result of the text-message revolution, many people still have a paralyzing fear of writing a letter—especially one that is going to go out to dozens of friends, family members and colleagues.

We’ve discussed the idea of donor-centric fundraising before, but we’ll unpack how these same principles of cultivating your supports can be translated into a single written communication that:

  • Is focused on the donor’s impact;
  • Has opportunities for adding personal touches;
  • Is easy to read and understand; and
  • Demonstrates gratitude.

Good Fundraising Letters Focus on Impact

The first few lines of a donor letter are your most important, since in those 8-10 seconds, a reader will either go “Oh, this is nice. I’m glad I am giving/will give to this,” or “Great, another ask!”

To avoid the eye roll, tell the donor what they did (or can do) right out of the gate. Consider openers like:

  • “You made a difference this year.”
  • “You changed lives with your generosity.”
  • “You made my school a better place to be.”
  • “You can make sure I’m prepared to succeed.”

Notice anything? All of these statements directly address the donor right out of the gate. The direct address is a powerful tool that should be used sparingly, but it engages the donor immediately because they instantly become a character in the story you’re telling.

The brain is wired to want to know more when it encounters a statement like this. The donor will want to know exactly how they made a difference through tangible examples. That means you should follow up your attention-grabbing opening line with examples of how this impact was made or what their impact will look like: “Because of you, ten students got books they wouldn’t have otherwise had.”

Don’t be afraid to use anecdotes, facts, figures and even graphics to show, rather than tell. Remember, it’s your job to collapse the space between the purchase of a product and better outcomes in education.

Good Fundraising Letters are Personal

Gone are the days when every envelope was hand-addressed. Marketing automation has lulled us all in to a false sense of personalization. A good fundraising letter must stand out from the masses of mail your friends, family and neighbors get by having strikingly personal touches.

For school fundraisers or other small grassroots fundraisers, the number of asking/thanking letters any single fundraiser is responsible for should be relatively limited in number, so personalizing them will be manageable. These custom additions to each letter don’t need to be anything extraordinary, but donors should be able to tell that you took the time think of them.

So, how do you stand out?

  • Handwrite the address. Nothing will get someone’s attention in the mail more (short of a colored envelope) than a handwritten address. It immediately lets the donor know this is a personal message.
  • Make sure the salutation includes the donor’s name. No “Dear Sir or Ma’am.”
  • Sign your name. How many printed signatures have you received that look blurry and unprofessional? A signed letter has an added sense of gravitas, because it shows that you intentionally endorsed the messages.
  • Include a personal note. It’s unrealistic to write 10-30 custom letters, but using a form letter with a personal note on an inserted card will make them feel extra special.

Every letter should feel like it’s received a little TLC from the sender. Think of these as the “nonverbal cues” of writing; you have to find unique ways to show the reader the intent and meaning behind the written words.

Good Fundraising Letters are Easy to Read

Making a letter easy to read is a largely technical matter. As a rule of thumb, adhere to those classic standards: at least 12 pt. font and no more than one page, unless you have a really good reason to make it longer.

Beyond that, look out for nonprofit jargon. Sterile language can quickly erode the human element that makes your fundraising letter compelling. People want to see real life change in people, not real fiscal improvement in an organization. If there are terms like “value proposition”, “cultivation” or “systemic improvement,” find a new way to express that idea, or consider if it’s even essential to include for this audience.

Generally, you should aim to write to an 8th to 10th grade audience. There are tons of free online tools that can help you gauge where you fall. Hemingway is a particularly fun tool that will help you clean up your writing in a flash, and give you a sense of how difficult or easy your letter is to read.

Good Fundraising Letters Express Gratitude

There’s not much to this one. Include a heartfelt, sincere message of gratitude (something more than just “Thank you”) at the beginning and end of your letter, and anywhere else it seems relevant in between. The strongest letters will include quotes from beneficiaries of your services.

It takes practice to get good at implementing all of these tips while still getting your essential message across. Ask other volunteers to edit and look specifically for these elements. You’ll find that priming your audience with these messages before making an ask will make it easier to have that face to face conversation, and that sending a thank you letter will make them more likely to come back next year.

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Author Bio Clay Boggess, Author

Clay Boggess has been designing fundraising programs for schools and various nonprofit organizations throughout the US since 1999. He’s helped administrators, teachers, and outside support entities such as PTAs and PTOs raise millions of dollars. Clay is an owner and partner at Big Fundraising Ideas.

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